So I sent my speech to Mr. Bott last Friday. I checked my e-mail all weekend but received no response. Then today during Calculus, I realized that I was checking the wrong e-mail. During second period, I went on the computer and saw that I still didn't have any response in my inbox. You don't know how freaked out I got.
When I got to class I asked Mr. Bott about it. He told me he really like it. He said he was sure he responded as soon as he got it and was surprised when I told him I didn't receive it. He printed it out, wrote his comments and gave it back. Those comments made me feel very good ^^
And now, here it is
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Superintendent Toliver, members of the Governing Board, Stagg faculty, family, friends, and Class of 2012!
Hi. My name is Sierra Brandt and I would like an applause when I am finished.
The past couple of weeks, people have been asking me what I was going to say to everyone. Well, after weeks and weeks of thinking and planning and preparing, and being too stubborn to ask for Ms. Duangsawat’s or some other teacher’s help because that would be just too easy....I came up with nothing. Sorry. :(
So I went to Madison Sadler, and she told me what NOT to put in my speech. Being the great friend that I am, I was going to not listen to her advice at all and put everything she warned me against in this speech. I also asked Mikeala Axton for help and all she said was to tell everyone she was going to the University of Wall-mart. So now with no basis for a speech at all except for…Wall-mart, I turned to every student’s best friend-Google! Oh Google, how do I love thee? Let me count the ways.
Though tonight is supposed to be about us, we should first stop and thank those who helped get us here.
Parents, thank you for your love and support.
English teachers, thank you for teaching us English.
Science teachers, thank you for teaching us Science.
History teachers, thank you for teaching us History.
Other teachers, thank you for teaching us other.
Math teachers….math is really hard.
Right here is where the speech becomes more serious. Aaaaaaand I lost half of you.
Most of us walked onto this campus as freshmen. Though people always told us that high school goes by fast, we knew that graduation was light years away. Sitting in Ms. Duangsawat’s freshmen honor class, graduation was not even a dream. It seemed so far away we didn’t even bother to think about it. And now, here we are.
Our class has faced many challenges to be here tonight.
Some of us had to catch up on credits.
Many of us had to work hard trying to balance school with either a job or a sport. Possibly both.
Others of us had difficult AP or honors courses to deal with which took up countless hours of studying.
Also this year, ALL of us had to face that dreadful day when Wikipedia protested SOPA and didn’t work for a day.
After years of waiting for our chance, tonight is the night when we will all finally walk across this stage.
Tonight is the night when we will all be commended for our hard work.
And tonight is the night when we will all be able to call ourselves Stagg High School, not students, but Graduates.
Though we are being congratulated for our accomplishments of the past, please remember that this is not the end. I’m just the first speech.
OK, so my three minutes are just about up. Google said to end with a bang so people will remember me. Ummmmmm kinda weird but if Google said I need a bang, I guess it’s alright. I mean you can always trust what’s on the internet right?
So here it goes.
Explosion! Boom! Onomatopoeia! Class of 2012! Thank you. :)
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Whelp, there it is.
Now for the comments.
From "So I went" to "math is really hard" there was a line to the side that said
I love all of this
The only problem he had was my reference to Ms. Duangsawat's freshmen honor class. He said I would not make the reference that specific, esp. since most of your fellow grads did not have her as a freshman. You could just say "sitting in our freshman English class...
This was pretty much his only problem.
At the end, this was what he said...
I like it. It probably is more light than what we typically imagine a valed. speech to be, but I don't think that's a problem. It makes its points and will keep the audience interested, I'm confident. Like I said to you, though, this kind of humor will demand carefully crafted timing. Just make sure to rehearse it a great deal.
I'm sooo happy that it is approved of. Now all that's left is the hard part...
REHEARSING
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